Sorry to see you don't have any comments yet, it's deserving of a few for sure. So here's one!

Overall, I felt that the film had quite a bit of potential, and had some good ideas, but it may have slipped up a bit in the execution. You had all the necessary story scenes, but that's kinda what it felt like, a collection of scenes. We didn't really have a chance to learn who the characters were, only what they did.

I think my main question would be why the main character kinda agreed not to attempt space travel, but then did with no hesitation.

The dialog had it's good moments, but generally felt awkward and a bit clunky. One way I've found to help that is to read through it all out loud, then ask myself if I would actually say that in their situation. This helps you to experiment with emotions and figure out better how the characters should talk to allow that to support what their communicating in the dialog.
I know, it takes a lot of practice, and it's something I seriously need to work on too. But hey, practice makes perfect!

However, there were some great parts to the film. Scenes like the opening, the workshop about a minute in, 2:04, and the ending shot and all have amazing lighting. Great use of LEDs! I love seeing people use lights inside the sets as "real" "in world" lighting.

The music in the opening and closing scenes was pretty cool, and the CGI actually worked pretty well.
Thanks for making this and sharing it.

Best of luck in the contest!